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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Foreign Language (12/09/10)

TITLE: Found At Rock Bottom
By Shawn McNamara
12/14/10


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Shane once was lost, a man of the world. Thirty long years filled with wrong doings and bad choices. His methods were those of deceit and manipulation. His body engulfed in scars from a lifestyle of hearing those who have tried to help, but lacked listening. It was the only language that Shane knew, and he spoke it so fluently, he believed the long told lies.

It was somewhere in his thirties when things started to turn around. He began to face his past to put the rest the many mistakes he’s made and rectify relationships directly affected by his wrong doings. His life slowly begins to make a turn for the better and his self esteem and confidence as a man soars to new heights.

Within his thirty fourth year, Shane travels far from home on a business trip. In a foreign land, far from home … tropical paradise entwined with his new found confidence stirs the pot of romance.

It was unexpected. Innocent passer-by flirtation lights the wick of enchantment and the spinning wheels web is a sticky one. A bit of cat and mouse leads to three long days of deep conversation and hot passion cloaked by professionalism to co-workers and conference partakers.

The business trip comes to an end but love’s adventure is just beginning. With 1400 miles between them, their love for one another remains fertile and is cultivated through constant communication. A fairytale romance blooms.

It had been months since they last were physically together in paradise. Yearning to be together again, Shane decides to visit his love. It was like they never parted, and love picks up right where it was left off.

While cultivating this love for one another, another seed is planted as Shane is reintroduced to God. It wasn’t the first time that God has peered into his life. He was raised going to church. His mother would frequently try to discuss a relationship with God, but it was always more of a debate.

How his love described love was like nothing Shane’s ever heard before. Her love for God enticed him, lighting the wick of curiosity. As she continued to share more of her story and relationship with God, Shane continued to ask more and more questions.

It was the final day of his stay and she invited him to attend church. It was like nothing He’s ever experienced before. Everyone was so welcoming. There were members dressed in slacks and nice shirts blended with those in shorts and sandals, overalls and even hats. There was no sign of a giant crucifix draped with Jesus. When the band began playing, the music that rang out was like something from off the radio, unlike anything Shane’s ever heard in a church before.

The next few months passed like a blur. Shane’s time was heavily impacted with a continued relationship with his love. His life was engulfed with her. Late nights on the phone, breaks at work on the phone sprinkled with a few trips back and forth.

Shane never saw it coming and it all happened at once. His job of ten years had taken its course and so did his relationship with his long distance love. They were both taken from him, leaving him spinning.

He was lost, not for a lack of faith, but understanding. He didn’t understand while his relationship with God was growing, why he was losing things in his life that he loved, or where he was comfortable.

Shane was spiritually immature and didn’t have even a gentle grasp of this language being spoken to him. There was so much pain and suffering, stress and personal anguish it eventually broke him, leaving him at rock bottom, cold and in tears lying on the floor.

So low, the only place to look was up and it was then that he found it. The love he had for her, God wanted from him. The attention he was paying to her, God wanted from him. The time he was spending with her, God wanted from him. The time and money he was mismanaging at work was taken away and God gave him less to manage.

His negative circumstances only brought him closer to God. Shane was only at the beginning of learning this language, God’s language of unconditional love, his journey and spiritual growth surely to be continued.


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Joanne Sher 12/20/10
What a journey! Thank you for sharing this.

There are a few places you switch from present tense to past tense. A good read-through can help with that.

Amazing what God can do, isn't it?
Yvonne Blake 12/21/10
Interesting! A little dialogue would help the reader relate to the characters better. I love your ending.
Beth LaBuff 12/21/10
You are so good with putting images in your readers mind. I was totally taken-up with Shane's journey. Your ending shines!