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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Body Language (11/25/10)

TITLE: Silence
By Shawn McNamara
11/30/10


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Ears take in sounds that he doesnt want to hear, or hes tired of hearing so he shuts down. Hes there in the room, but his expression like a canvas yet to be graced by the colored stroke of a brush. Each word like a sword, poking, prodding and piercing deeply within, yet his lips remain sealed almost curled as if hes fighting the urge to fire back. He feels just as they do, he bleeds just the same but hes trying to display a grace and peace to remain calm amongst a verbal storm. An internalization of feelings and a suppression of words join hands and stir an evil concoction, the devils playground as the verbal barrage persists, and you can see the urge to retort build as the lines of a clenched jaw peer through his cheeks. Theres a fire in his eyes, as he squints and glares at his opponent. His hands clasped together, almost to prevent the ability to reach out and touch someone. His shoulders held back to create an illusion of strength, but hes weak and crumbling before this bombardment. His emotions have him wound tight; he wants to respond but fears only a reactionary explosion that does more harm than good. Stress exits from his feet, draws lines on his forehead and a wave of heat swells throughout the body. Right, wrong or indifferent, he yearns to remain composed. The ability to avoid confrontation a loss, for he is at war, not with the source of words but with himself fearing the man that once was, would appear again. Silence may never be the answer, but perhaps only a lesser of two evils.


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diana kay12/03/10
very interesting and descriptive thanks ...... i want to know what happens next!
Verna Mull12/05/10
Would like to have heard a little more. It would be an easier read if there were some divisions in the writing. Good job of describing body language.
Lillian Rhoades 12/05/10
Lots of descriptive writing here. I like this.." An internalization of feelings and a suppression of words join hands and stir an evil concoction, the devils playground."...and others. You can feel the strain of restraint. I was thrown off somewhat at the beginning when you began your subject with "Ears" and went on to use the pronoun,"he." Perhaps, this is something you might want to look at.
Nancy Bucca 12/06/10
Wow, what a description of body language! The only thing that seems to be missing is a clear setting. (Unless it was left out on purpose) It has me wanting to know more.
Brenda Rice 12/08/10
An amazing description of an internal warfare. I like your wording. I could feel the tension build as the piece went on. Thanks for sharing.