The Official Writing Challenge
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11/26/10
What a wonderful story. we have all been there in one way or another. What a job our heavenly Father has to look out after his wayward children. I'm sure the ticket wasn't wonderful, but it did add to the story, just wondering what you did with it! Great job.
11/27/10
This is a good example of how we too often jump to conclusions. A little more dialogue would help this be more realistic, but I like the message of recognizing God's work in our life.
11/29/10
God often changes our plans so that we might be a blessing to someone else. Your story proves that point.
In some areas of your piece, you had inner thoughts which could have been italicized on separate lines to break up the paragraph. Lot's of descriptive action.