The Official Writing Challenge
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Good story, but left me wanting to hear more, like how your Mom's husband accepted all of this etc. Guess it is not too different than a modern movie, however. Well written.
Interesting characters. It was a little hard to read the dialect, but I could figure it out. I liked the ending.
Even with all the bloopers, this was an attention holder.
Although, the ending left questions, it could have been because of the 750 rule.

Your ability to write shines through.
I have to agree, I stumbled through this one a bit. I got lost in the dialogue of it all myself. Some of the words you have to be real careful if you are copying a ton they must be consistent. I felt like a few of them weren't. Great story nevertheless, just keep writing. At least that's what I'm told. I'm in beginners too. :)
Congratulations on placing 7th in level 1. This was a heartwarming story. It had its bouts of sadness but the love for your father was quite apparent. Good job!