The Official Writing Challenge
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11/26/10
Good story, but left me wanting to hear more, like how your Mom's husband accepted all of this etc. Guess it is not too different than a modern movie, however. Well written.
11/27/10
Interesting characters. It was a little hard to read the dialect, but I could figure it out. I liked the ending.
11/29/10
Even with all the bloopers, this was an attention holder.
Although, the ending left questions, it could have been because of the 750 rule.

Your ability to write shines through.
I have to agree, I stumbled through this one a bit. I got lost in the dialogue of it all myself. Some of the words you have to be real careful if you are copying a ton they must be consistent. I felt like a few of them weren't. Great story nevertheless, just keep writing. At least that's what I'm told. I'm in beginners too. :)
Congratulations on placing 7th in level 1. This was a heartwarming story. It had its bouts of sadness but the love for your father was quite apparent. Good job!