The Official Writing Challenge
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11/12/10
This mom is going to have her hands full with this creative little mind. Cute story.
I loved the ending! I laughed out loud for real. Patrick is a precocious youngster.

My husband and kids never understood why I wouldn't let them have their computers in their actual rooms.It was for this very reason I insisted the kids' PC stay in the family room!

This story has a great message that many parents should read. You did a great job without coming across as preachy and the humor was an added delight.
11/13/10
Very creative approach to the subject. Loved the humor.In fact I enjoyed the whole thing. Oh, great message also.
You put it together in a well paced, fun read with a message that many parents of school children to hear. Good writing.
Congratulations on your great placing! Nice job!