The Official Writing Challenge
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You did a great job showing how gossip can spread like wildfire. I chuckled how no one told anyone except for...

A little red ink. You don't need to put quotes around each sentence, just at the beginning of each new speaker and paragraph, then at the end of the speaking.

You did a great job with showing the dangers of just telling one person. The ending was great too. Nice job.
11/07/10
Super ending!

Shann's suggestion about punctuating dialogue was right on...in addition, consider having a more even mixture of action/description and conversation. All-conversation pieces are sometimes hard to follow.

You made your point very well!
I found this to be funny and so true as well! It was a little hard to follow with just dialog but the fact each person didn't tell anyone except...cracked me up. That's so spot on with how rumors get started. Great ending!