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09/19/05
And indeed those who Wait will find Beauty.

Lovely article.
09/19/05
A nice story, but perhaps slightly predictable. This would be nice for a jr. hi. / high school youth group to read and discuss.
09/22/05
It's very good. Very inspiring. Wish I had this type of litrature when I was in high school. Something that finally teaches the complete opposite to what the world is teaching. Someone's gotta compete with all the porn out there!
09/27/05
Kelli, this was a lovely story - particularly at the end where they close the door behind them and she takes off her purity ring. Lovely.

Just a hint with dialogue though. Always start a new paragraph whenever a new person is speaking. Also, you don't need to open and close quotation marks at the end of a sentence in the speech, if it's the same person talking. If you aren't sure what I mean, just send me a PM and I'll point you in the right direction. But you definitely have a lovely feel for writing and you told the story beautifully. With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)