The Official Writing Challenge
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With Veteran's Day just around the corner your beautiful story is a reminder of the sacrifices made by the families who suffer in silence so that our country stays safe. This story had my eyes filling with tears. The pain and pride was palable throughout the whole piece.
10/29/10
This beautiful story made me cry. My father and my son have both served in wars, so I could slide right into the mother's shoes. You did an excellent job drawing the reader into Grandma's secret place where she stored her beloved son's letters. Very poignant.
10/31/10
Very well done! I particularly enjoyed your first paragraph, with its description of the grandmother's treasures. We learn a lot about her just from that list, and that's what "showing, not telling" is all about.
Congratulations for placing 3rd in your level!