The Official Writing Challenge
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09/19/05
This is beautifully written; the alliteration in your second paragraph is sheer poetry.
This is georgeous; I want to get on a plane right now! Wonderfully written, expressive and evocative. I can almost smell the mountains! God bless.
09/20/05
What beautiful, intoxicating, transporting description. Wild applause for you!!!

One thing you could work on is to make all your verb tenses consistent. It's a minor thing, but I think it would make this much more professional-looking.

All in all, a really great piece. Keep up the good work!
09/21/05
Your descriptions are wonderful. I agree with Anita-there were changes in verb tenses in the last two paragraphs. All in all, this piece grabs you. Good work.
09/22/05
(while pointing a finger at you - just imagine it)
"move up a level!"
uh, you did good real, good. very descriptive and you'd better heed my warnings and make it fair for the rest of us... grrr... heh-heh.... "move up a level"
09/23/05
Sounds absolutely wonderful! Makes me want to plan a trip.
I loved this line: "They roll instead of rear, they invite instead of impose." This was lovely. You have captured the essence of pre-WW2 Europe and reminded me why I loved the biogrpahy of the von Trapp family that I read years ago.
09/27/05
Michelle, this was a beautiful entry and probably would have done extremely well in the Challenge, except it was way over the maximum word count allowed. The maximum is 750 words, and your entry came in at 840.

Please don't be discouraged though - I think we'll all look forward to seeing more from you in the future. Just keep the word counts in mind (150 minimum-750 maximum). With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)
I really enjoyed getting a picture of this lodge. I love The Sound of Music! :-)