The Official Writing Challenge
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You told an exciting tale. I'm eager to read what happens next. You did a nice jobshowing the sisters' dialog and setting the scene. Make sure you hit the preview buttonbefore you hit submit that'll show you the glitch with the italics. Nice job.
10/21/10
Your title was a great hook! Loved the journey these two sisters are on.

Really good writing here!
10/24/10
I like the little details (like the bowl of popcorn) that make this story seem true to life.

It read more like a middle chapter in a longer work than a complete short story; I'd have liked some sort of closure. What does knowing about their ancestry imply for these characters? Incidentally--those who were accused of witchcraft in the trials are generally considered now to have been innocent. I'd like to have seen that acknowledged--maybe that's what they'll discover in France!

Agreeable characters and a mood of adventure make this a pleasant read.
Your writing skills are evident. I don't see you staying in beginners for very long at all. Your story is a novel in the making. Would love to see you take it further.
What an interesting idea. It does sound like a chapter in book, what with the ending. I enjoyed reading it. Good job!