The Official Writing Challenge
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You did a great job adding extra details to the conversation that really helped me get to know the characters better. I laughed at the line Don't you eat on Sundays? I think you could have ended it with them hugging and saying I love you. But overall it reminded me of what many parents with college kids are going through. Nice job.
10/21/10
As I read your story, I couldn't help but remember the song, "Breaking Up is Hard to Do." Many "my kid's first time away from home" Moms catch Separation Disease.
Very timely subject this month:-) I suggest you edit and review before submission;noticed a few missed words, etc...
10/22/10
I can really relate to your story as the mother of grown sons. What the grown kids don't realize is that their mom will always worry when they don't call, and yearn to see them no matter how old they get. Good job of "keeping it real." There are a few technical errors that would probably be caught during proofreading.
10/23/10
Those empty nest years are so hard!

Work on making your dialog sound more natural.

I bet Judy will gladly go home more often, if it'll keep her mother from visiting her dorm!
10/24/10
Good thoughts on the need to see those loved ones face to face.
10/26/10
I agree with Judy's mom. E-mails and texting are very impersonal. But I've had to learn in order to stay in touch with those I hold dear. I could visualize the situation and I understand how the mom felt. Thanks for writing.