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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: The Inner Person (09/09/10)

TITLE: New Creation
By Tiara Huffman
09/16/10


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“Whoever is a believer in Christ is a new creation. The old way of living has disappeared. A new way of living has come into existents.” I stopped there, once again letting myself fall back onto the day I’d first heard this verse.


I was in a prison cell alone starring at the floor, my sentencing was almost through. And all I could think of was what happens now? I never thought I’d see life on the other side. I was twenty-six when I was convicted of murder of the second degree. I’d served an eighteen year sentence—I was now forty-four--I was going to be released in three days.

Clatter came from the other end of the hall. A guard was opening the door that led to the hall. I heard voices whisper.

“There you are, but I don’t think He’ll acknowledge you. He doesn’t care. He doesn’t listen, and you with that silly bible isn’t going to do him any good.” I heard the guard’s familiar voice say.

But the reply that followed I didn’t know. “Well thank you sir, but let’s leave that up to Mr. Tanner and God.” The foot steps followed then slow and measured like they were reaching for a propose. The guard’s loud angry clanking feet followed with reluctance. The guard banged his nightstick against the bars.

“33 got up someone’s here for you. I know, hard to believe you haven’t had a visitor in fifteen years. But you do.” I glance from the corner of my eye again. All I saw was the man’s khaki slacks and brown penny loafers.

“Whatever…good luck McGunner.” The guard walked off and stood back in the middle of the hall away far enough we had privacy but close enough that he could be here in a heartbeat if I went for his neck.

The man stooped to my eye level, though I didn’t face him then. However, from my peripherals I could see his was about the same age as me with light brown hair and a mustache.

“Micheal Tanner. I’m Tim McGunner, I know what you’ve done, but it doesn’t matter. You’re getting out in three days, and there’s a new life you have to live now, unless you want to come back here.” He paused and I looked at him, not because of what he was saying or for wonder where he was going with any of this. It was what he called me. Micheal Tanner. My name I hadn’t been called that in years, around here I was my inmate number.

I was touched; surprised that his man would call me by name I had to listen to what he had to say.

“I don’t know your heart or thoughts,” My heart? I hadn’t thought that way, but was my heart really where the death, destruction and torment desire ruled from?

“I don’t judge you for what you’ve done. That’s something I leave to the almighty,” Almighty?

“If you want to change, from the live you’ve lived that got you here, then I’d like you to meet someone. His name is Jesus Christ and he came to give you new life. I’m going to read you something now.” I nodded and the man looked through the book in his hands. The thin paper made a loud crinkle noise in the hall.

God loved the world this way: He gave his only Son so that everyone who believes in him will not die but will have eternal life,” he looked up from his book and smiled.

“There’s another,” he said turning there. “
Whoever is a believer in Christ is a new creation. The old way of living has disappeared. A new way of living has come into existence.” He stopped and closed his book.

“Micheal, God sent his only son so that you might live a life with him. If you believe that he did this and ask him to live in your heart he’ll make you a new creature and give you a new way of living with love, joy and peace. Would you like to pray, to ask God to make you a new man?”


I looked at the book before me, the one he read and gave me after reading those verses. Those verses I held onto dearly. Before my inner man was one of death and evil. And now, is one of love and joy just like Tim McGunner had promised.




2 Corinthians 5:17, John 3:16 God’s Word Translation.


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 09/16/10
This is a lovely message. You have a few typos like existence, but that's no biggie. I really liked the message behind this, that no matter our age or past sins, Jesus is there waiting for us. what a wonderful message. Your love for Jesus and your passion to spread his word is very apparent in your writing.
Nichole Hall09/17/10
I liked your description of the prison. I had no trouble depicting it. And the message that it's never too late was great!
AnneRene' Capp 09/18/10
This is filled with so many great truths, from the harsh reality of time wasted from one putting off giving their life to the Lord to the power of witnessing to others. I believe that you just might be gravitating toward devotionals which is AWESOME! I also liked the prison setting which shows that we are all salvageable, regardless of where we've been.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 09/19/10
I've read all of this week's entries and thought I'd come back to some of my favorites and revisit them.

You wrote like you've experienced prison before. The little details like the guards using numbers instead of names is something that made your story credible. Also the fact that a chaplain came to visit him before discharge was a nice touch and a good way to express your message without coming off preachy.

Now for a little more red ink-- you really do have quite a few typos. If you don't have a challenge buddy to proof your paper , leave it totally alone for a day or two, then read it aloud. This will help you see those errors. I was also confused why it was mostly in italics. Make sure you preview it several times before you hit that submit button.

I'm sure if you asked around a bit you'd find someone who would love to edit or give you an opinion on your piece.

You have such a sense of excitement that emanates from your work. This was a creative idea; there were only 2-3 prison stories and they were all quite different. It's obvious that you want to share Jesus with others. One last piece of advice for everyone is to read, read, and read. If you're outgoing, I'd suggest you leave comments too. Even if you just Leave them on your level. That is one of the things that has helped me become more confident in my own writing.
Christina Banks 09/20/10
It is never too late. I worked in a juvenile girl's prison ministry during my college years. It was amazing how hard these girls were, but we saw several of them trust Christ and grow in their spiritual lives. Your story reminded me of that experience.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 09/23/10
Congratulations for placing in the top 10 of your level! See it does pay off to keep at it!
Amy Michelle Wiley 10/05/10
Definitely an "inner person" story. Great job with the setting and inner thoughts.