The Official Writing Challenge
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I really enjoyed the story. There were quite a bit of typos.
In the first sentence you use when instead of went. Also remember to start a new paragraph each time there is a new person talking. It really helps if you leave the piece for a day or two then read it aloud. Your message definitely came through loud and clear. Keep writing.
09/17/10
A good story on what makes marriages last - listening to the nudging of the Holy Spirit, humbling oneself, and being willing to make the first move towards reconciliation.

Keep writing and do lots of proofreading - you'll get there!
09/20/10
Marriage takes a lot of work. You did a great job of capturing a believable situation.
Congratulations for placing 7th in level 1!