The Official Writing Challenge
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09/16/10
I liked the setting that you drew the reader into. At first, I was a bit confused as to who Marlene and Neil were and what was happening, but I soon figured it out. Well, I'm not sure who Marlene is but perhaps I just missed that in my eagerness to read more. At any rate, it was good to see your MC develop the courage to stand up to her ex. As a Christian, it's always a fine line to straddle between not being a doormat and being filled with Christ-likeness.

A few misspellings, but nothing major...I enjoyed this - keep writing!
09/16/10
What a great "feel good" story with plenty of suspense and your ending was precious...very true to life!
09/18/10
This is a great story of how faith can totally change our lives. I was riveted to the page from the first paragraph. You did a great job of building suspense. Even though the day was perfect I knew something big was going to happen.
09/20/10
He who is in you, IS stronger than he who is in the world. Thank you for this wonderful story that portrayed this truth so clearly.
09/23/10
Congratulations for placing 9th in level 1!!!! Keep at it!