The Official Writing Challenge
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09/16/10
I liked the setting that you drew the reader into. At first, I was a bit confused as to who Marlene and Neil were and what was happening, but I soon figured it out. Well, I'm not sure who Marlene is but perhaps I just missed that in my eagerness to read more. At any rate, it was good to see your MC develop the courage to stand up to her ex. As a Christian, it's always a fine line to straddle between not being a doormat and being filled with Christ-likeness.

A few misspellings, but nothing major...I enjoyed this - keep writing!
What a great "feel good" story with plenty of suspense and your ending was precious...very true to life!
This is a great story of how faith can totally change our lives. I was riveted to the page from the first paragraph. You did a great job of building suspense. Even though the day was perfect I knew something big was going to happen.
09/20/10
He who is in you, IS stronger than he who is in the world. Thank you for this wonderful story that portrayed this truth so clearly.
Congratulations for placing 9th in level 1!!!! Keep at it!