The Official Writing Challenge
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I think this might have been more effective without quite so many "reminded me.." The first part was far more compelling, with an interesting and kindly character.
In one way, I like all the scripture references, but in another way it detracts from your own description of the place. So, I'm not quite sure how I feel about this. I definately don't hate it though.
This has alot of promise, but the scripture references were distracting: would like more personel description here. Also in paragraph 1, it would make it more personel to write about the research project, and then show the characters thought process of feeling nervous about where they are staying. Lots of promise. God bless.