The Official Writing Challenge
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This was hysterical. I was laughing throughout. There were a couple of spots were a word was missing but you did a great job painting a very vivid picture for me.
09/13/10
This was very funny. I hate to admit it but sound like something I do, being caught in my own trap. I think I would have written it Robo-Roach. If you put line between paragraph it will be easier to read. But you did a wonder job of making me smile.
09/16/10
There are some very unique ideas here. With all the details in the story, it would help to put breaks in paragraphs for clarity.