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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Hotel/Motel (09/12/05)

TITLE: Shady Shack
By M'Kayla Kelly
09/16/05


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Shady Shack

Iím standing by this shady shack
Got nowhere to go
But my bags are packed.
Nowhere to go Ė nowhere to hide
So, Iíll sit for a moment here outside.

Iím sittiní here beneath this tree
Got nowhere to go
Now its raininí on me.
Nowhere to go Ė nowhere to hide
So, Iíll run to the shelter there inside

Iím wiping bugs from off my face
Canít see where to go
Webs are covíriní this place.
Nowhere to go Ė nowhere to hide
So, I take a few steps, I slip, I slide.

Iíve fallen here on the grimy floor
Got somewhere to go
And itís out that door.
Out there Iíll go Ė out there Iíll hide
Far away from them buggies here inside.

Iím leavin now from this shady shack
Got somewhere to go
And I wonít look back.
New place to go Ė new place to see
I hear a bus and it stopped for me.

Iím waving bye to the shady shack
Find somewhere to go
And take a hot bath.
I board the bus and I sit alone
I wipe slimy spiders off from my phone.

Iím callin now for a resting room
Need somewhere to go
I can get there soon.
Yes, Iíve been to the shady shack
I canít stay there and I wonít go back.

Iím neediní more of an upscale place
Need somewhere to go
I will wash my face.
Come on now, come on along
Like the ad says weíll leave the light on.


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Jan Ackerson 09/19/05
I had to read this one several times to make up my mind, but I've decided that I really like the unique meter and rhyme scheme. It's different, and it works for me. And it doesn't state the obvious to the reader, but I believe we're reading about a soul on the brink of salvation--yes?
dub W09/20/05
This is a song, find someone to score it.
Alexandra Wilkin09/22/05
Like Dub says, this is a song. Really loved the use of metaphor in this to describe the souls journey from the shady shack to the light; subtle, intelligent and written with feeling. Really good stuff, well done. God bless.
Katherine Douglas09/22/05
Mmmmmm.... I don't know about this maybe I need to read it a few more times or hear it put to music