The Official Writing Challenge
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Wow you brought the desperate feelings of one who had tried to kill herself to the surface. You missed a quotation mark here and there but once I got over that I was holding my breath, imagining the internal and external pain the MC was experiencing.
08/27/10
I really liked the emotion put into this piece. There were a few rough spots, but overall I think you did a good job at portraying a unique and emotional story.
What a wonderfully told account of such desperate despair, that so many of us have walked through. You conveyed the depth of such a horrific ordeal, meticulously and believe this story will make others actually stop and think, before responding to their own anguishing pain in a rash moment.