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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Breathe (08/19/10)

TITLE: Steve's Emergency
By Ken Ebright


Maggie, a secretary, walked into Steve's office, he was the president of Cross Cards, a Christian greeting card company.

Maggie, a gray- haired lady, who was in her 50's said, "Good morning Steve, before I take dictation on your letter, I wanted to let you know that the fire department is here to do an inspection."

"Okay," said Steve who was an overweight man with brown hair in his 50's.

Maggie sat down and put her notepad on her lap. "I am ready to take notes for your letter."

Steve sat up in his chair and said, "This letter is to Jeff at the Christian Retailers Association."

"Okay," as Maggie sat up in her chair and took the cap off of her pen.

Steve then stared into space for a second, he grabbed his right arm, and then fell out of his chair.

"STEVE!" Maggie's face turned white, as she leaped out of her chair and ran behind his desk.

Maggie picked up his hand and check to see if there was a pulse, “Steve, are you okay?”

She couldn't feel a pulse in his wrist then she tried to feel one in his neck. She noticed that Steve was not breathing, and his lips were turning blue. Her own heart was beating fast at the thought of loosing her boss. Maggie ran into the break room where the fireman were inspecting the fire extinguisher.

"Mr Fireman, Mr Fireman!" Maggie screamed, not knowing their names.

"My name is Keith and this is George, how can we help you?"

Out of breath Maggie said, "My……boss, my boss collapsed."

"Where is he?" as Keith picked up his bag.

Maggie raised her arm and pointed to her right, "He is in the office down the hall."

Keith ran with Maggie while George got on his radio and called an ambulance.

When they arrived in the office, Keith turned Steve's body over on his back and started CPR. He inhaled once and checked his pulse. He inhaled a second time, still no pulse. After the third time slowly Steve started to breath on his own.

Groggily, Steve said, "What happened?"

"You passed out Steve, the fireman did mouth-to-mouth." said Maggie.

"Hey Steve, I am Keith. We have an ambulance on the way which will take you to the hospital and we will get you checked out."

Steve looked into the Keith's eyes and said, "Praise the Lord, you gave me the breathe of life."

The paramedics came and took Steve to the hospital. The doctors never figured out why Steve’s heart stopped. It was a God thing that the Fire Department was there that day.

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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 08/26/10
This is great, you added details so that I could clearly picture the scene. The story moved at the perfect pace, drawing out the suspense. The last sentence was a cute play on words.
AnneRene' Capp 08/27/10
Good job pulling the reader in right at the beginning. I knew something was up when you mentioned the Fire Dept. Inspection. You also kept my attention throughout with your use of dialog, making me feel as though I was right in the middle of it all. I also really liked Steve's first response after passing out, of, "Praise the Lord." :)
Verna Mull 08/27/10
Good story, and well done. I get confused with breath and breathe. I could be wrong, but thought they were interchanged at times.
Patsy Hallum08/27/10
Great story, well written. THe last breathe, should have been breath. You gave me the breath of life. Rest is right on. Keep Writing.