The Official Writing Challenge
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09/19/05
Your middle section, with the Lord repeating "pray for her" was very effective, and you did a good job with conveying the pastor's emotions. Get someone to help you with the mechanics of writing: run-on sentences and spacing porblems hindered this story's readability. A good story about listening to God's voice despite our fears.
09/19/05
Wow. You have good insight and you hit the whole God/prayer/us thing right on. You do need some work on your spelling, structure, paragraphs, but the story itself is a keeper. Be Blessed!
09/20/05
paragraphs needed!!