The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 610 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
09/19/05
This could use some edits for capitalization, punctuation, and spacing. It's certainly a good way to relate to the anxiety that Joseph and Mary must have felt.
09/19/05
Wow! what a title and a story,just little things you need to fix.
otherwise,its a very good story.
09/19/05
punctuation, grammer, paragraphs...the basic stuff need a little work, but good re-relling of an old, old story!
09/19/05
Overall good story-telling ability! Definitely need to work on run-on sentences, capitalization, and punctuation...
09/19/05
Good story! Blessings!
09/20/05
Good imagery in conveying the anxiety of the parents and how Joseph and Mary must have felt many years before. Please edit your work carefully.
good story telling! I enjoyed this.
09/22/05
I like the modernization of a timeless event. Good story.
Congrats on your Highly Commended Award. A great re-telling of a familiar story. Well done!