The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a great story. I like that fact that carbon monoxide is odorless. It's a great twist on the topic. And if it's a true story Thank God for ER and John Stamos :)
08/06/10
A "non-smelling" story with a reverse topic slant. Very well written and suspenseful. Nice flow and ending, with clarity as to a real danger lurking in the air we breathe. Perhaps a different title?

This was a good read and the reader could sense the urgency here in the main character. Nice job! :)
08/11/10
I loved the title, although it promised something it didn't deliver. The story flowed well and had a nice ending. But I found all the italics a bit distracting.
08/16/10
Great way to point out CM poisoning. I almost did not read it because of the title tho. Glad I did. Keep writing.