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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Hotel/Motel (09/12/05)

TITLE: Burnt Out Light Bulbs
By Joseph Civitella
09/12/05


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It was two in the morning, and I promised myself that I’d stop at the next motel, or whatever looked like a place to rest.

I passed an illuminated cross that shone brightly, and below it were the words “Jesu Sa es.” A short distance later, I saw a sign that read “Mo el,” and below that “ acancy.” This town must have a shortage of light bulbs, I concluded.

I pulled up to the main building, got out of my car, and stretched. Out of nowhere, a dog appeared at my feet and began sniffing at my legs. It was a beautiful chocolate Labrador. I petted it for a while, then walked to a door marked “Office.” I knocked three times, loudly enough to be heard, but there was no sound coming from inside. I waited a few minutes, then knocked again. Still no sound. The dog paced away slowly. I sat down on the porch, and leaned back against the wall.

It must have been five minutes later when I heard footsteps in the office, then the sound of a key turning. The door opened, and an elderly man looked out. “Somebody there?”

I stood up and faced the door. “Yes, sorry to wake you. I wondered if you had a room available?”

“Sure do,” he answered. “For how many people?”

I looked around and couldn’t help smiling. “Just for me.” I noticed that the chocolate lab was in the office now.

“Come on in.” He walked to his desk. “How many nights you staying?”

“Only tonight,” I answered as I walked in. “What time is check out?”

“Whenever you wake up,” he said. “Not like people are knocking down my door to rent the place. Except for you, of course.”

“Sorry again if I woke you…”

“Oh, you didn’t wake me. Daisy here just about licked my nose off. Couldn’t help but get up to see what the fuss was about.”

“She’s a beautiful dog. Quite friendly.”

“Yeah, she is that. Just appeared out of nowhere one day, soon after my wife passed on. Been here ever since. Can I see your driver’s license?”

“Sure.”

“Funny thing about her,” he continued, “every morning at about seven she disappears, then comes back home about nine. Neighbors say they’ve seen her lounging by the chapel up the street. My wife used to go to mass every morning, and she used to bring daisies with her from our garden. That’s why I named her Daisy.”

I shook my head in disbelief.

“Here you are, Mr. Alcott. Room three. You can park your car in front of the door.”

“Thank you. I appreciate it, sir.”

“No sir required. Name’s Tommy Vickers.”

“Thank you, Mr. Vickers.” I turned to leave, but something possessed me to ask one more question. “Just out of curiosity, what was your wife’s first name?”

“Samantha,” he said. “Why?”

“Oh, nothing, really…”

“The sign at the chapel? No one can figure out why, but no matter what we fix or how many new light bulbs we put in there, the ‘s’ and the ‘v’ just don’t light up anymore. Not since Sam’s funeral. Just like the ‘t’ and the ‘v’ on my sign out front.” He nodded. “Her initials there, mine here.”

I nodded as well. “Good night.” I noticed that Daisy wasn’t in the office any longer. I drove the short distance to my room, and in the headlights I could see Daisy sitting right by my door. I walked to the porch and patted her head. “If I didn’t know any better, I’d say you act more like a human than a dog.”

Daisy licked my hand for a while, then walked away slowly. I stepped into my room, turned on the light, and noticed the bible on the nightstand. Beside it was a bookmark with a cross drawn on it, and the words “Jesus Saves.” But the ‘e’ in Jesus and the ‘a’ in Saves were worn out.

I laughed to myself. My initials were E.A. It had to be just a coincidence! Or was it?

I retrieved a pen and traced the worn out letters. And that’s when it struck me. No matter how tired I was of my life, no matter how far away I tried to get from all my troubles, Jesus always found a way to draw my attention to him. It simply didn’t matter how burnt out the light bulbs in my own life might be.


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terri tiffany09/19/05
Great story! I really enjoyed it especially the dog since I used to have one like it!
Jan Ackerson 09/19/05
This is well-written, and you gave distinct personalities to the old man and the hotel visitor. I wondered, though, why your narrator was "burned out". You could have made him SOUND more world-weary, and then the ending would have had more impact. Very nice piece of writing.
darlene hight09/19/05
Very creative! I enjoyed it!
karen McLamb09/19/05
This is a very great story and the title fit right in.
Daniel Owino Ogweno09/19/05
Yes! Even when Jesus seems to fade in our life, it is still not difficult to figure out the 'initials' that would make us complete in Him. Greet story.
Jessica Schmit09/19/05
This is a beautiful story. The pace moved quickly and gave a very interesting spin on the topic. Good job, very creative.
sandra snider09/19/05
good job! I liked it. Nice handling of dialogue.
Donnah Cole09/19/05
Great dialogue! Good story. Loved the dog...
M'Kayla Kelly09/19/05
I like your story. It has a different theme to it and it was easy to read. Keep up the good work! Blessings!
dub W09/19/05
Extremely well done. Best I have read tonight at any level.
Lisa Graham09/20/05
Beautiful entry! What a sweet, precious story. Keep writing!
Katherine Douglas09/20/05
this story gave me goose bumps! it is well written, and an easy read. thanks for sharing it.
Nina Phillips09/20/05
This is plainly a neat story. I loved it from beginning to ending. It may have something to do with the lab (just kidding). Very nice entry..wonderful actually! God bless ya, littlelight
Stephen kaptain09/23/05
nicely wooven story. I liked every bit of it. God bless!
B Brenton09/24/05
simple, but it was good. congrats.
Deborah Porter 09/26/05
Well Joseph ... what can I say? I was acting as a judge for all three levels last week, and your entry was the first entry I read. I couldn't believe that I was seeing something so good, so soon - and on Level 1. Congratulations on your 1st place in the Level 1 awards, and more importantly, your 2nd place in the Editors' Choice. Time for you to move up to Level 2 (at least!) Keep up the great work - I believe we have another excellent FaithWriter coming up the ranks! With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)
Kyle Chezum09/26/05
Wow wow wow! This has to be one of the best stories I've read in the Challeneges in a long time! Way to go! A well-deserved win!
Debra Brand09/26/05
Excellent story and message. Thank YOU!
Joseph Civitella09/26/05
Thank you to everyone for your kind feedback and sentiments. I very much appreciate your encouragement, and look forward to reading your articles as well. God bless...
Debbie OConnor09/26/05
Great story! Congratulations on a well deserved win!
Julianne Jones09/26/05
Congrats on a well-deserved win. Watch out Levels 2 & 3! Loved the message in the story - so beautifully done and to the point without being preachy. Well done.
Crista Darr09/27/05
Fantastic! Welcome to the FaithWriters Writing Challenge!
Linda Watson Owen09/27/05
Congratulations, Joseph! Super story!
Deborah Porter 10/24/05
Hi Joseph. I'm just preparing the new FaithWriters' Anthology and need a short (two to three sentences) bio piece to include in a new section for the book - "Meet Our Authors." The bio notes need to be written in the third person. Could you please send it to me via a Private Message? Thanks so much. Love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)
Deborah Porter 11/21/05
Me again Joseph - and this is an even more urgent need. FaithWriters have not received your release form to allow your story to be used in the Journey of Faith Anthology. If they don't receive it, they can't use it and everything is ready and waiting to go. Please contact me at debporter@breathfreshair.org about this URGENTLY to let me know whether you want your story to appear in the book or not. If they don't get the release straight away, we have to use the next entry in line. Love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)


   
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