The Official Writing Challenge
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It was a thrilling story with so much detail.

The ending was kind of sudden and not quite what I expected, but I imagine the word count limit might have hindered you some.

You did a great job keeping my attention right to the end. I want to know so much more, like why the man was so angry he vandalized the church. Keep writing. You have great stories to tell.
08/04/10
You told an interesting story, but it felt incomplete. I too want to know why the vandal was so angry. I think this should be a much longer story, but your dialogue and descriptions were realistic.