The Official Writing Challenge
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Loved when you said that your "ears pinned down", made me lol. You are so right though about the processing of our food....I believe it to be the number one culprit leading to bad health. Although...I still eat more of it than I should, (mostly out of necessity) but ask God to Bless it to the nourishment of my body anyway. :)
This is a nice turn of the topic. Your passion definitely shows up in your words. You gave great examples as well. Just remember to cite the version of the Bible verse , as well as possibly citing the study that was done about the intestines. This gives the reader the chance to check out and possibly even move and learn more than what you mentioned. Good job.
07/27/10
Your ears were pricked down . . . how witty ! . . . very good.

Your message was delivered with an arrow precise bullís-eye.

The words you used are clean, clear, and concise . . . but boring.

Your title . . . A Taste of Life . . . promised an inviting message and your delivery had one, but being wrapped, as if in a research paper, let my interest dwindle with that of the attending congregation.

Without one whittle of doubt, your writing ability has the power to control the reader . . . think harder about being creative with it.

Bryan.
07/27/10
Our ancestors would never believe how foods have changed! Fresh vegetables from the garden have a taste far better than what we find in stores!