The Official Writing Challenge
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I found this to be cleverly different and really enjoyed it and truth is, I like mice :)
07/16/10
You made this an interesting tale and I enjoyed reading it.
Not sure it was on topic.
Keep writing.

Mona
07/16/10
Though I found the ending predictable, you did a nice job of tying this story together. I'm not sure how this tied into the topic, so be more aware of writing to the topic next time. Definitely keep writing.
07/17/10
Clever little story. You show some good writing talent. I assume the hearing was in the scream. Blessings,Ruth
I agree. Great little story but more on the topic would be great.

I agree with the comments on all counts...well told tale.
07/20/10
Even though this story doesn't seem to fit the topic, please don't be discouraged. You show lots of potential as a story-teller. This little tale was creative and captivating. Keep writing.