The Official Writing Challenge
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06/18/10
Really nice and poignant. You captured the kid in Sonny very well. The ending is great.
06/20/10
Wow--so poignant! Jesus can use a letter to Santa to find a way to answer prayers! Lovely story.
06/22/10
A lovely story with great progression. I particularly liked your last line.
Your punctuation needs a bit of attention. For example your first line should have read: 'chores?” Maria yelled.' If you check out the faithwriters forums, there are some great teaching tools on improving your writing. I've certainly benefitted in the quality of my own output. Bless you.
Great story and you captured Sonny's feelings perfectly. Keep writing and God bless.