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05/13/10
I'm glad Mrs. Hamilton didn't yell at Tommy for a childish moment in his young life. Because of her kind words and a choice to look the other direction, good came out of it.

What a inspiring reminder--and I'm glad to see a positive portrayal of an english teacher! Great job
Another great story with a happy ending...makes me a happy camper :)...This was so inspirational!

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05/14/10
What a good reminder for all of us to encourage others. One never knows what a kind word will accomplish. Thanks for writing this.
Thank you for a very interesting article and how teachers can help or hurt a child by their actions.
What a touching story! A teacher can make such a difference in a child’s life!

A few writing suggestions— If you hit Enter twice between your paragraphs, the stories are easier to read. “Affect” should be “effect.” Most of the time, “affect” is the verb and “effect” is the noun. So, when you “affect” something, you bring about an “effect.” You might already know that and just put the wrong word by mistake; I’ve been known to do that! Also, just a suggestion, but watch for unnecessary words or repetitive words. When you say that Austin and Tommy had been passing a paper back and forth, you don’t need to say “to each other.” That’s implied by the fact they’re passing it back and forth. Again, “the doodle he’d drawn of her wasn’t flattering” would be just fine and “to her” is basically unnecessary. And when Tommy gathers his things, “together” is somewhat redundant. Someone remarked on repetitive words in my writing some time ago; it’s really helped me improve, so I figured I’d pass it along. Overall, I loved this story. So touching!
06/01/10
I like this - what an excellent teacher! This well written story really highlights the enormous value of encouragement and care in how we 'mould' and teach the young. Well done.