The Official Writing Challenge
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05/06/10
I thoroughly enjoyed this story from begining to end!

It was easy to visualize each character as well as the walkway to the old church.
This would make a great novel. Good job!!
05/06/10
Good job!!!
Good illustration of how reading a book can change our whole perspective. I'm wondering what this story would have looked like from Jarvis' point of view...just curious :-). I loved the cobblestone and dogwood.
05/07/10
That was certainly a treasured find!

I wish you'd made Sara a more sympathetic character...she was pretty unpleasant, making her sudden change of heart seem a tad unrealistic.

This seems longer than 750 words.

I love the character of Jarvis--he could have a book just about him! Very intriguing fellow, and well-written.
I'm a brand new member. I absolutely enjoyed this story. It was so well written. I love dogwoods and I'm from Virginia originally so I was hooked right away. Good Job
I enjoyed this very much. Isn't it wonderful how God can change a person's heart in just one beat. Well written. Keep writing and God bless.
05/08/10
Jan was right... there are too many words... however... it is well written and a good story that should be expanded into a much longer form.