The Official Writing Challenge
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09/12/05
A very nice extended metaphor, with an ending full of hope and promise. I was at bit puzzled in the middle--your were standing on the pier, and then in the next paragraph, you were bobbing around in the waves. But a good job, nevertheless, ot comparing your life to a voyage.
09/13/05
Ditto - R.E Jan's response. Nice, loving dedication to what it's like to put our Lord in charge of our journey, our life.
God bless you for your writing brilliance.
09/14/05
you are ready for the next writing level! but who are Miriam Beard and Henry Miller? If the reader doesn't know who they are, either just paraphrase their thoughts, or briefly identify who they are. But very, very nice writing!