The Official Writing Challenge
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05/07/10
Tony was fortunate to have such a caring staff.

Your scenario is very unlikely in a public school, however. You might want to give your story a second edit, in particular for punctuation of dialog.

My heart goes out for the lonely Tonys of the world, and you wrote him in a gentle and moving manner.
I love your story. I'm glad that Tony found such a faithful friend. I do think it may have been better to use quotation mark to show that people where speeking.
Such a tender loving story. My heart goes out to all the young people in school who feel alone. We need schools with caring staffs, but alas the fallen world. I enjoyed this very much. Keep writing and God bless.