The Official Writing Challenge
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05/07/10
What a treasure that was!

I wonder if you have perhaps too many metaphors and similes. They're dandy literary devices, but a few sprinkled delicately in an story of this length are plenty.

This was a tender story, written sweetly.
You had me sitting right beside you! Jan put it well, this is sweet and tender. Liked your descriptions too.
What a tender trip down memory lane. I agree with Jan. She knows the ins and outs of writing. I loved this. Thank you and God bless.
I enjoyed the illusion to a faith heritage. God encourages us by showing that He loves us by weaving His design--long before we live out our own days. I held my breath a bit with the fragile pages of the journal--good descriptions!