The Official Writing Challenge
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Engrossing and compelling. I pray he makes it home. You have to finish this story.
I could smell the salty air and see the seagull with ease. I enjoyed it thoroughly.
04/30/10
Very well done! The seagull added to the reality of the story...giving humor and distraction.
Joanna:
I've come back to read this a few times. Love it!
Maria
This is great! You really captured the ambiance and added humor. This story, in my opinion, should place high!
Love it!
05/02/10
Excellent! The antics of the bird added so much interest to this story. I half expected the Captain to take it home to his daughter instead of a parrot. :) Your writing skills are top-notch, and I don't expect I'll see you in Beginners much longer.
Very good article. I enjoyed reading it.

I have one minor suggestion. I thought the names Sal and Sally were too much alike. It distracted me for a minute, but it certainly didn't ruin the story. I loved the sailor's message in his letter. Very touching.

Big thumbs up.
Engaging and very well written. I was wrapped up in the atmosphere of that ship and loved the addition of the friendly feathered seagull. I too, would like to see this continue and know he made it home.:)
05/03/10
That bird really bumped this story up from very good to top notch! What a wonderful little detail--that's the sort of thing that marks a very "crafty" writer!
05/03/10
This is very well written, with a lot of wonderful details that add depth and reality. I enjoyed this, and would love to learn more about what happened to this character! Well done.
05/05/10
You have wonderful detail in this entry. I loved the development (and different versions) of the letter! Very nice!
Congratulations on the 2nd place ribbon. Delightful, I say.
05/06/10
Joanna, super congrats on your ribbon!!
Congrats on the second place ribbon!
Excellently written and so realistic. Looking forward to reading more of your writing. Keep throwing bricks.