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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: The Writer’s Skill/Craft (04/22/10)

TITLE: the old typewriter
By Elizabeth Cain
04/28/10


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Click, click, click,
The old typewriter’s rusty keys reverberated as the writer briskly typed at his desk.
Clink, click, ping,
He paused to slide the lever back, and the ring of the old machine rattled throughout the old dusty room.
Click, click, clack,
The writer then continued to type, carefully choosing each word he would use.
Click, click, clack
As time passed the writer fluently filled the page with the story of truth and unfailing love.
Ping, click, click,
By now he’d filled the pile of pages on his desk with words of scripture.
Click, click, clunk
Words that could save a life, and make that life into something spectacular.
Cluck, clack, clunk,
Even a desolate void could be given life and beauty when spoken to by Jehovah.
Click, click, click
And when the words of God are taken to the void of a sinful heart, it also will be filled with life and meaning.
Click, click, ping,
For what goes to the heart is in turn pumped throughout the whole being.
Click, click, click,
Thus when the words of God are taken to heart following its decrees becomes a lifestyle; a response to a new life that has been found.
Click, click, clink,
So we either live by the life-giving supply of God’s words,
Click, click, ping
Or we settle for the deadly lies screamed by the world.
Click, clank, click,
Shall we ignore its words and choose to keep the words sealed away in a closed book where they have no meaning in our hearts and lives.
Click, clink click.
… Silence…
The writer smiled and lifting his aged hands from the keypad. He removed his glasses and wiped the lenses. Then with shaky hands he carefully gathered his pages together.
He laid the parchments down in a neat pile and rested his elbows on the table, studying the result of his toil: the finished product of a writer’s craft.


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/30/10
This is a wonderful message.

But I must admit I was distracted by the click, click, click. I think you could have inserted it three or four times and it would have had the same effect, if not better. Try to give the reader some white space to make it easier on the eyes.

Other than these easily fixed details your story was magnificent. Your words read like a song in my heart.
Yvonne Blake 04/30/10
You don't see many of those old typewriters around anymore. Well done!
Jan Ackerson 05/03/10
Clever approach to the topic.

I'd have liked to see the "clicks" and other typewriter noises in italics. You need to use a bit of HTML for that; you can find intsructions in the forum FAQs (link at the top of this page). And while you're there, stop by my thread on "Writing Basics" for beginner and intermediate writers--I'd love to meet you there!

Did people put parchment in typewriters?

This was a highly entertaining read--I enjoyed it very much.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/06/10
Congratulations in placing in the top 10 in your level.
Margaret Kearley 06/01/10
I love this old author and can picture him carefully choosing each word he is writing of His great God. His elderly frailty, that you portray so well, reminds me of 2 Cor.4:16 'We do not lose heart. Though outwardly we are wasting away, yet inwardly we are being renewed day by day.'
Lovely story. Thankyou
Tori Porteous07/02/10
I thought that this was a very creative idea, and that it was very interresting on how below each of your lines you would put the "clicks" into place!

And on how your wording is so mastered and true!

And that someone could love it, all the way threw!

~Tori