The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a wonderful message.

But I must admit I was distracted by the click, click, click. I think you could have inserted it three or four times and it would have had the same effect, if not better. Try to give the reader some white space to make it easier on the eyes.

Other than these easily fixed details your story was magnificent. Your words read like a song in my heart.
04/30/10
You don't see many of those old typewriters around anymore. Well done!
05/03/10
Clever approach to the topic.

I'd have liked to see the "clicks" and other typewriter noises in italics. You need to use a bit of HTML for that; you can find intsructions in the forum FAQs (link at the top of this page). And while you're there, stop by my thread on "Writing Basics" for beginner and intermediate writers--I'd love to meet you there!

Did people put parchment in typewriters?

This was a highly entertaining read--I enjoyed it very much.
Congratulations in placing in the top 10 in your level.
06/01/10
I love this old author and can picture him carefully choosing each word he is writing of His great God. His elderly frailty, that you portray so well, reminds me of 2 Cor.4:16 'We do not lose heart. Though outwardly we are wasting away, yet inwardly we are being renewed day by day.'
Lovely story. Thankyou
07/02/10
I thought that this was a very creative idea, and that it was very interresting on how below each of your lines you would put the "clicks" into place!

And on how your wording is so mastered and true!

And that someone could love it, all the way threw!

~Tori