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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: The Reader (04/15/10)

TITLE: Christmas Morn'
By Joanna Stricker
04/21/10


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On those Christmases, so long ago, the children went to Grandma and Grandpa’s to laugh and to play. From their homes, they brought small toys and stocking-candy. Their parents,uncles, and aunts kept stealing the candy away, but before long some more cousins would arrive and sneak in new items to share.

Many a present under the tree was jostled and poked. The mystery—whose could it be? The older kids told when the little ones begged, but the adults—they merely shrugged, grinned, and shook their heads.

The air was filled with the smells of the season. Pies and platters of cookies were carefully placed out of sight; but the aroma of gingerbread, cinnamon, and nutmeg mingled pleasantly with the feast being prepared. Grandma and the aunts all bustled around the kitchen, fixing the turkey and dressing, mashed and sweet potatoes—way too much food to eat in just one sitting! Many a child was shooed out the kitchen door, only to pop back in, twenty seconds later—through the other door.

Weary Mommas and Poppas would sit for awhile, grabbing a moment’s rest. They’d been up since dawn—eager children pulling them from their beds.

There was the fascinating door of the back bedroom; no kids could enter, only adults. There was always something left to be wrapped, and kids lingered in the hallway—simply hoping for a glimpse.

Hardly a bite of breakfast, did the kids have; so the veggie tray provided food which easily traveled, grasped in little hands. Good thing it was there because the stocking sweets—definitely kept them on their feet.

At long last—it felt like hours! The time to open presents was near, but one last thing was left to be done. Every child, adult too, must sit and listen to Grandpa—just for a while. Hard it was, there was much to distract. The tree, it glimmered and twinkled with lights. Even the angel, sitting on the highest bow, seemed to call their attention with her sparkle and glow. And the presents—there were so many. It was hard to wait and see for oneself, even though the adults promised that there were plenty.

But Grandpa was fun, Grandma too. So they sat and listened albeit—not without a wiggle or two. Grandpa opened the book and turned to Luke. He read them a story about shepherds and sheep, a mighty host of angels, and wise men who traveled from afar—following a star! The children they paused and thought for a minute—of lambs and angels and faraway lands…and a baby wrapped in a blanket. They knew that the babe Jesus was the start of it all—so much excitement for one little baby to create! A choir of angels, at least three kings, and some lowly shepherds, all came to bend a knee!

When Grandpa was done, the book was closed. After a few quick words and maybe a prayer, with Grandpa’s blessing—it was finally the time! The little bodies jumped and twirled in glee. One by one, gifts were given. Bright paper and ribbons—they flew everywhere!

Now many years have passed, and yet I remember. Last Christmas was a bit of surprise, when once again adults and kids, now-turned-adults, kindly asked “Grandpa” to take a chair. And for each of you then-children, even those who could not be there, my prayer is—to that book you will look. For I know—your answers—you will find them there.


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Misti Chancellor04/24/10
What a fun story about Christmas memories! Glad that they took the time out to read and reflect on the Christmas story.
Joanne Sher 04/26/10
This is lovely - such beautiful descriptions, and a powerful message. You put me right there!
Caitlyn Meissner04/26/10
Loved it. What a splendid Christmas message.
Beth LaBuff 04/26/10
Yes, this is perfect for the topic. I could smell and see all the activity with your vivid descriptions. Now I only have eight months to wait! :)
Catrina Bradley 04/26/10
You took me back to Christmases at my own Grandparents' house. Love the nostalgic mood, and the rhythm. It has the feel of a joyful Christmas poem.

Must my opinion, but you might want to use dashes more sparingly. Commas or semicolons in place of some of them would make this a smoother, more polished, piece.

I look forward to reading more of your work. You have a great way with words that engages the reader.
Catrina Bradley 04/26/10
Oops, I meant to say "Just" my opinion. :)
Cat
AnneRene' Capp 04/26/10
Heart warming and well written. Your definitely not destined to stay in this level!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/27/10
We always read the Bible before opening Christmas presents or looking for Easter baskets. What a wonderful tradition to pass on to our children.
Gerald Shuler 04/27/10
Could we be related? You just described the Christmas family reunions of my own youth. Good use of your writing ablility.
Edmond Ng 04/27/10
A very interesting read. I can sense within your story the eagerness and antipation of the characters waiting for the time to draw nigh. Great job!
Lyn Churchyard04/28/10
Enjoyed reading this "poem". It flowed beautifully. A wonderful memory of family Christmases.
harvestgal Ndaguba04/28/10
Wow, this is not really the christmas I grew up with, but more like the Christmas we've created for our kids. Just instead of the Grandfather doing it, it's their Dad. It did bring back many Christmas memories though. Keep writing, I really enjoyed it.
Pam Ford Davis 04/28/10
Pure joy! You gifted me with Christmas in April!
Loren T. Lowery 04/28/10
I so enjoyed reading this and I couldn't help but notice a sweet, lyrical quality about it - almost as if it should be written in verse rather than prose. None-the-less a very quality piece filled with so many memories.
Mona Purvis04/28/10
Fresh and friendly, on topic, good message and interesting. all the assets of a good entry. You have talent.

mona
Rachel Phelps04/28/10
I like the tone of this - unusual and fresh - and Christmasy! Great work.
Verna Cole Mitchell 04/28/10
I've been there/done that as the child, the mother, and the grandmother--which make the reading of your story all the sweeter. Good job!
Carole Robishaw 04/28/10
Good job, I, too, seemed to hear some verse in the story, and enjoyed.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/29/10
Congratulations in placing in the top 15 of your level. Good job.
Joanna Stricker04/29/10
Thank you all for your lovely comments. I was down to the last day before the deadline and tossed 3 other ideas (mainly because I could only think in 'poetry', and I'm not a poet)! I have a hard time thinking of words that rhyme--when I want them to. I like the suggestions and totally agree, there were too many hyphens! So, I have 3 mostly-completed but not edited stories if anyone is looking for some, lol.


   
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