The Official Writing Challenge
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I read through your words a few times. The thoughts were hard to follow, at first. I then I saw the beauty of what you had written; Abigail will come forth as gold. I felt the tenderness and sadness of the Reader as He read the soiled pages of her life. The pages of our lives, He knows and He will redeem each and every part.
04/25/10
I like the way Abigail's life actually occurred during the reading. You had some inconsistencies in tense and phrasing and I was confused about the empty page, since you went on to describe her actions. I really liked when He put her book in the fire and saw her life turn into gold.
Interesting approach to the topic. A little hard to follow. A couple of suggestions that have been made to me in the past that I'd like to pass on: 1) Do more showing than telling. This felt like it had a lot of telling in it. 2) Come up with a title for your work rather than using the topic. It will help draw people in to read what you've written.

I like the thought you share in your story. Keep writing. :-)
This is absolutely beautiful.

You might want to divide the first paragraph into smaller ones. It'll help grab the reader's attention.

Congratulations in placing in the top 15 of your level. Good job!