The Official Writing Challenge
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Oh, the splendor of young love!
I like the way you describe the letter as it resides in his pocket. It actually comes alive.
I had to read the third paragraph a few times to clarify who the generational neighbors were?
Good job.
Even without dialog, which I usually miss, this story was so engaging, but with a light touch. You did a beautiful job, building the suspense. I think your writing skills will move you on up to the next level soon, and I look forward to reading more of your work.
One other thing: I, too, had trouble with the "generational friends." Didn't quite get that.
This is an incredibly descriptive piece of writing. You absolutely brought this letter to life, and your MCs feelings. WOnderfully done!
I can definitely feel the MC's emotions. Congratulations in placing in the top 15 of your level. Good job!