The Official Writing Challenge
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04/22/10
Oh, the splendor of young love!
I like the way you describe the letter as it resides in his pocket. It actually comes alive.
I had to read the third paragraph a few times to clarify who the generational neighbors were?
Good job.
04/24/10
Even without dialog, which I usually miss, this story was so engaging, but with a light touch. You did a beautiful job, building the suspense. I think your writing skills will move you on up to the next level soon, and I look forward to reading more of your work.
04/24/10
One other thing: I, too, had trouble with the "generational friends." Didn't quite get that.
04/28/10
This is an incredibly descriptive piece of writing. You absolutely brought this letter to life, and your MCs feelings. WOnderfully done!
I can definitely feel the MC's emotions. Congratulations in placing in the top 15 of your level. Good job!