The Official Writing Challenge
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Touching story. You set the mood within that shop very well. I could almost hear that jingle on the front door. You also had ME wanting that sword and I'm not a boy! :)
04/16/10
I really enjoyed this story and could feel the excitement of the little boy...the boy who became an adventurer! The sword really was mighty in the eyes of that little boy.
04/17/10
I really enjoyed the voice in this story.
I enjoyed the beginning of the story. I remember going into antique stores with my parents when I was little. It was a nice trip down memory lane. I must admit I didn't quite get the ending as I thought he was buying it for his son, but that's okay my brain is tired. Your descriptions were delightful. I swear I could even smell what that little shop must have smelled like.
Okay duh I read it again less tired and realized they were shopping not to buy but to inspire a story. Sorry I told you my brain was tired. It was quite clear when I read it this am. I guess I needed sleep. Great job still!
04/19/10
Super story. I love your creativity with "the muse." Your title is great! (I can't pronounce it either.) :)
You told so much about these two in so few words. Great entry. What an adventurous life the boy has with his father.
Well crafted with an interesting setting and dialog. Good writing.
04/22/10
Joanna, Congratulations on Highly Commended! (who cares how the word is pronounced anyway!) :)