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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: The Pen is Mightier than the Sword (04/08/10)

TITLE: Rapid Knock
By susan woolen
04/13/10


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Rapid Knock

The sharp, steely points of two swords clash in battle and there is violence, antagonism, and destruction. The shiny point of a Christian writerís pen meets paper and wisdom, inspiration, and hope are conveyed.

Lonely and deeply troubled, seventeen year-old Jack heard the court judge order him to live in the stark, grey-walled Boys Home for wayward boys, near where the crimes occurred. Jack had stolen money, broken into several homes and a church, and threatened more harm with a steely knife, his own sword. Destruction and antagonism had become Jackís way of surviving an abusive home life.

Pursuing a degree in education, I volunteered to work at the Home with the hope of gaining a deeper understanding of troubled teens. Abused as a child, I wanted to help others who had similar experiences. Little did I realize then the help that I would receive.

The supervisor of the Home agreed to let me talk with Jack but vehemently warned me not to trust him, that he was a skilled liar and a bold thief.

-Always watch your purse and never be alone with him, he admonished.

Feeling alittle fearful, I considered leaving but walked instead into the dim living room of the Home. Tall and slim with jet black hair and blue eyes, Jack stood waiting. He grinned and immediately wanted to talk.

-Donít believe a word he says, the supervisor smirked and left the room.

Nonetheless, I listened to Jack and something deep in my heart went to him.

- I broke into a church and stole all their food, but I left a note that someday I would come back and pay for it, he told me openly.

Could I believe him?

Over the next several weeks, Jack and I spent time together sharing hamburgers or tacos, walking in the nearby parks, and laughing over card games. He told me about his unhappy life that weighed heavily on his mind and about the recent abandonment by his family. He ached to change his life to the good but didnít know how.

Always a gentleman, Jack never worried me with his behavior.

Sadly, Jack was unexpectedly moved to another boysí facility and I lost tract of him for a long time.

One quiet night as I sat at my kitchen table immersed in reading, there came a sharp , rapid knock at the front door. Stunned, I opened the door to a beaming and very excited Jack standing along side a tall, smiling man

-Remember the church where I stole their food? This is the minister and I want you to meet him! Jack almost shouted with glee.

Craddled in Jackís arms was his Bible. Its written words had changed his life and he had returned to share the joy with me. The minister confirmed that yes, Jack had paid for the food and now belonged to the church.

As we talked into the night, I felt a deep desire to know more about Godís blessed power as I saw how He had touched Jackís life.

Jack no longer needed his knife sword. He lived now by the Ultimate Words penned in the Bible.


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AnneRene' Capp 04/15/10
Great heart warming story. You left me with a joyful smile, both on my face and within my heart. Also, got the goosebumps!

Great use of the topic and Kudos for stepping out in unknown territory to help this boy who may have still been lost, if you had not opened your heart. (Well...if this is a true story and is about you) :)
Jan Ackerson 04/17/10
Having worked with "bad boys" for most of my adult life, I found this full of hope.

I'm not sure if you left off the quotation marks from your dialog as a style choice or not--I found it mildly distracting. Note: "a little" is two words.

Thanks for this inspiring story.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/17/10
This is a great story . How great to have faith in this young man while all around him were doubters.
Amanda Brogan04/20/10
Touching and well-written, especially for a beginner and someone new to Faithwriters. I also like your clever title.

I love the end where Jack comes to Christ and makes the main character want to reach out to the Savior as well.

This was an encouraging story to read. I expect that you'll be moving up to Intermediate soon. ;)
Gerald Shuler 04/20/10
I really enjoyed your entry. You have a powerful style that leaves the message unmistakable. I do agree with Jan's view about the lack of quotations. The way you did this entry doesn't take away from the power of your writing... quotations just makes it easier for slow minded readers like me.
Patricia Herchenroether04/20/10
Very nice story. Watch out-your creativity is showing!
Beth LaBuff 04/20/10
Beautiful story... a testament to how a life can be changed. This shines!
Karen Macor04/20/10
Nicely written story and heartwarming. You have a nice style.
Noel Mitaxa 04/21/10
Good descriptive style. Welcome - and soon goodbye - to beginners. God bless you as your writing ministry grows.
Sarah Elisabeth 04/23/10
Susan, congrats on placing 7th in Level 1! That's an accomplishment :-)

If you haven't already, be sure to check out the highest rankings on the forums:

http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/viewtopic.php?t=29573