The Official Writing Challenge
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04/15/10
Well....where do I begin?

Creatively cute. BUT, just want to say, that I am with Winnie, all the way! Just can't take the pepto bismol pink, but unlike her...just not ashamed about it. :)
04/15/10
This is so so so so so funny. I'm laughing so hard I can barely type. If this doesn't win, then there is no justice. I love it!
04/16/10
For-um heaven sakes! ROFL.
04/17/10
Clever allegory!

A few notes: you slipped between past and present tense a few times--and your HTML would have worked if you'd used the < and > signs rather than brackets.

I hope your readers read beyond the clever dialog and see the deeper meaning in your cute entry.
04/19/10
You have given wisdom for the mature wrapped in the simplicity of a child. That is difficult to accomplish but you did it very well. Some issues with proofing and formatting but that will come with time. I enjoyed this humorous entry.
04/19/10
LOL! It took me a couple paragraphs to get the connection! :) Very clever work on this (and for the record--I think it's OUT of the box!) :)
04/20/10
A very creative, different entry - great fun to read. Not that I've ever complained about my own short, stubby pencil's length :-)
04/20/10
Let's try that again: pencil's COLOUR I mean. Thanks for a great article!
04/20/10
This is cute. (I wonder how Deb will feel about being honored as the "heroine pencil" of the story? ;) )
04/20/10
I love not only the free, whimsical spirit of this story, but the way it was told as well.
So carefree, yet profound. Simple but complicit with a lingering truth that nags the conscience to dig and look deeper. Wonderful job! Doubt you'll be in beginners for long.
04/20/10
Just thought of something else, your style (especially with the title)reminds me somewhat of Erma Bombeck...loved her work. : )