The Official Writing Challenge
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This was great and loved the humor. I'm middle aged, over-weight and cranky...just because! Seriously, this was a very enjoyable read!
This was a really funny and desriptive story. You wrote this really well. Excellant!
03/20/10
I lieterally laughed out loud at "dropped like an anchor". Great imagery!
03/21/10
Your descriptions are so vivid! I'm still grinning at imagining being on the trip with these two. Try to limit your use of exclamations points - your words convey the intended emotions so they aren't necessary. I groaned when I got to the end and saw what else was on their itinerary - but I still want to join them. Good writing!
03/21/10
What a vacation trip. It sounded amazing (red insect welts and all). Nature definitely provides some "Wow!" moments for us! I enjoyed this journey with you!
It sounds like an awesome vacation, and I loved your sense of adventure, it really showed up in your words.
03/22/10
This was a lovely story - you took your reader right into the forest adventure with you. Descriptive and fun. Great job!
03/22/10
Great story.
I loved taking your trip with you...good story.
03/22/10
You let loose of the rope on this one and plunged into a GREAT story. Very pleasant to read and look forward to seeing at the next level.
03/22/10
Sounds like a great adventure! If this is a true story (and I would guess it is), then I'm sure you enjoyed the other activities... even if you WERE exhausted afterwards. I'm ready for a vacation now!!
03/22/10
Whew! Exhausting trip, but sounds worth it. What a place to wow about!
Congratulations on placing in the top 12 in your level!