The Official Writing Challenge
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This entry is seriously deep and incredibly thought provoking. I reaped an obedience factor for myself. One of my favorite parts is your revelation that God knew you wouldn't throw your necklace away, but you might give it away. It shows that He meets us where we're at with the purpose of growing us.
Good story and powerful message. Rejoiced with you as you obeyed God to get rid of the necklace and although you gave it away as a gift, you followed through at God's leading and humbly called Beverly. Praise God, she was a sister in the Lord who also listened!
What a heavy cross to carry--huh?

Pick up your cross, and carry Jesus within your heart.

I liked your story.
Your story really drew me in, and that's the sign of good writing.

There were several errors in punctuation (commas and quotation marks missing, primarily). I'd love to see those polished up, as your writing has considerable potential.

There's an informal "class" for beginners in the forums of this site called "Jan's Writing Basics". It's on a short vacation right now, but there are some lessons there that might be of interest to a blooming writer like you. I hope you'll stop by! Send me a PM if you can't find it.