The Official Writing Challenge
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03/12/10
This was delightful.I really enjoyed the part about going without the coupons that inspired the idea to begin with. That seems so typical in my life at least. I did notice a little typo in the 2nd or 3rd paragraph you said move instead of movie, but that's easily fixed.
I enjoyed the pace that you told the story in as well. You did a good job of describing a family outing.
03/12/10
No Humph from me. Thought this was entertaining. Even had a few chuckles throughout. I even had sympathy for you with the Jeans, T-shirt and Hat!
03/17/10
Good job of bringing this family outing to life through your descriptions, the voice of the MC, and the flow of your writing made it an enjoyable entry.
03/18/10
Matthew, congrats on placing 6th in Level 1! Be sure to check the highest rankings on the forum:

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