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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Eek! (02/25/10)

TITLE: EEK
By Charlene Reid
03/04/10


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EEK...
Standing in my kitchen - minding my Ps & Qs
When suddenly in my peripheral a mouse came into view
It was huge and scary - and running straight at me
Too terrified I froze and could not turn to flee
A noise a shrill as Id ever heard was ringing in my ears
It seemed to come from all around - adding to my fears
Was this monster screeching and hissing as it ran?
I dont know how it happened, it certainly was not planned
But I found strength in my limbs and legs
That did NOT match my age
I was now looking down from atop my counter
Only to see the giant trying to take cover
My husband had come in, troubled by the sound
He asked why I was screaming and would I please get down?
I told him of the terror and tried to make him see
This was not a simple matter but a great catastrophe
His only words were come on dear Ill get the mouse for you!
And proceeded to chase the beast away My Hero Tried & True.


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 03/04/10
A very cute and loving poem. Small suggestion would be to use white space to make it easier on the reader's eyes. But well done, I smiled at the picture you so aptly described.
Jan Ackerson 03/05/10
My hubby rescues me from wee beasties, too--God bless them!

Work on making your meter more consistent--an extablished pattern of stressed and unstressed syllables. It'll make your poem easier to read.

This was very cute.
AnneRene' Capp 03/08/10
This was adorable to me. Loved the part where your strength you managed to find did not match your age. This gave me a great chuckle. Even shared it with my hubby and he chuckled too!
Sarah Elisabeth 03/11/10
Charlene, congrats on your highly commended award! Don't forget to check the boards for the highest rankings:

http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/viewtopic.php?t=29085