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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Eek! (02/25/10)

TITLE: Wild Life in the City
By Beth B
03/03/10


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My husband was in the Air Force and stationed in Northern California when we married. After his honorable discharge, we moved to the country. It wasn’t unusual to see possums, raccoons, skunks or deer dead or alive along the roads. Often, at night, we heard coyotes in the distance. A few years later, we relocated to the city.

Still newlyweds and just starting out, we had few possessions. We rented a furnished apartment which helped make our house a home.

It seemed like an average day, no surprises, or so I thought. I opened the hall linen closet to retrieve clean towels for the bathroom, when I found critter droppings scattered throughout the shelves. Eek! A mouse!

Don’t get me wrong, I love Despereaux -he won my heart. And of course, there is the famous Mickey Mouse. They are cute, adorable and winsome. I prefer my mice in books and movies, not having full reign in our house … but not for long! By hook or crook that rascal would be caught and on its way out the door. I hunted high and low. I needed to find his trail. The clanging and banging of cupboards and drawers could have woken the dead.

My husband and I drove to the local hardware store and bought a set of mouse traps. We had back up if needed. Upon returning home, we set a trap in the kitchen. Then stood there like guards. Eventually we gave up and went about our business. Although we hadn’t heard a SMACK! BANG! I’d frequently check the trap.

The following morning - no mouse. We added a small cube of cheddar cheese to tempt our uninvited guest. The next day, the cheese was gone but no mouse. Smart little critter… he knows what he likes and how to retrieve the morsel. But we’re smarter.

That evening, I envisioned waking up and finding two beady-eyes staring at me, a mouse laying on top our bedspread, with cheddar crumbs covering his face.

Repeat performance. No cheese. No mouse. This called for drastic measures. We tied the cheese to the traps trigger. We’re getting wiser. We went to bed confident we’d catch the rascal.

The next morning – still no mouse. The cheese was still there. My husband and I were busy in separate rooms. SMACK ! BANG! I ran to the kitchen. He had taken the bait. The trap had ended his adventure. It was left to my husband to dispose of our uninvited guest.

Sometime later in the laundry room, I washed all our clothes from the dresser and towels from the linen closet. I had my back to the open laundry room door, suddenly something jumped on my back and hung on with its claws. Eek! I shook off the stray cat and closed the door. Get me out of here! I’ve had enough of this wild city life.

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Verna Mull 03/04/10
this was a fun story.
Phee Paradise 03/04/10
Nice, funny story with a real setting. It could have happened to me. I love the ending with the cat.
Jan Ackerson 03/05/10
Fun irony in your title.

This was short--I'd have loved some dialogue to help me to get to know you and your husband better, and more of the stray cat at the end.

Those eyes in the night...shudder...
Gregory Kane03/05/10
I'm surprised your stray cat didn't polish off that mouse! Well told, just needs a bit more atmosphere.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 03/09/10
Funny little twist at the end. I really liked your last line, I laughed out loud.