The Official Writing Challenge
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03/04/10
This would be a good one for people who've suffered trauma to read.

Some of your dialog felt a little bit stiff to me--and I had to smile at the image of 'dialing' a phone. Are there any dial phones any more?

Your last quarter was very comforting.
Great story and I liked how you ended it, feeling your emotions as an adult.
You did a good job telling the story. I was glued to my seat during the first part. I liked the ending with Jesus holding her as well.
Congratulations on the top 15 in your level!