The Official Writing Challenge
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Cute short story of the many facets of motherhood! My hat is off to you for not tweaking out over the partially dissected mouse on the DINNER TABLE :)
03/04/10
I think I'd have to get rid of the table...

Watch your use of exclamation points--they're best reserved for dialog, and avoided in the narrative.

What an inquisitive daughter--did she become a nurse?
One word: Gross!

That story made me shudder and think "Eek" even though I never use that term.

Good use of the word (!) and great visual imagery.

I don't think I could eat on that table again.
03/05/10
I give you the Mother-of-the-Year award because I would have been hysterical even though the mouse was dead!
What a wonderful but gross picture you painted. I really enjoyed it, if she goes on to nursing school she'll likely have to dissect a cat, sounds like she is primed and ready.
Very good storytelling!
Congratulations on the top 15 in your level!