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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Shhh. (02/18/10)

TITLE: Big Doin's Two Rows Up
By Ruth Brown
02/25/10


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The worship flowed, and my hands were lifted in praise, I felt a tap tap tap on my leg. I held up one finger to my side, a signal to wait, but my five year old grandson didn't know the signal.
Then came in an unsubdued voice, "Grammy look."

I tried to ignore it, then a bit louder, "GRAMMY."

Okay, now he had my attention.
Raising my finger to my lips I said, "Shhh! We are worshiping now."

"I know that, Grammy, but you gotta see this."

I looked around at his pained little face, sat down, and pulled him close.

" What is it buddy?"

"Guess what, Grammy."

"What honey? "

"Look,"he began to wiggle one of his tiny lower front teeth.

"Wow that's cool, why don't you... "

I watched as he jiggled and out flew the tiny tooth.
I looked in the floor trying to find it.

"Grammy, blood."

"Oh, here honey," I handed him a tissue, "hold it on there," I said in his ear.

Meet and greet time was called. All our neighbors had seen the tooth pulling and gave Jalen high fives and clapped for him.

By the time folks were seated again, he was giving exaggerated toothless smiles to everyone.

I was still on the hunt for the tooth. Aha! I spied something with red on it on the floor. I pinched it in my fingers and handed it to Jalen's mommy, she eyed it, then snickered and cupped her hand to my ear, "It's a piece of peppermint."

"Oh," I said, and shook my head.

I doubled over once more scrutinizing the floor and the the seat. There it was tucked in a dip in the pew cushion. I dropped the tiny trouble maker into my daughter's hand. Jalen's eyes had followed my every move.

I put my mouth to his ear and said, "I bet that's the very first tooth God gave you."

"I bet it is too,Grammy."

That evening, "Here Jalen," she handed him a baggie," put it in here for safe keeping.
Tonight you can make a wish and put it under your pillow."

"This is a very important day for me, isn't it Mommy?"

"Yes, his mommy tried to cover her smile, it really is, little man."


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Philippa Geaney 02/26/10
This is a really sweet story. You have captured and made real a family - three generations of the most precious coinage on earth.
Mary Knoll Santos02/27/10
Very well written piece. I enjoyed Grammy's sweet and cheerful ways with Jalen. I enjoyed the lovely little story all the way through the ending.

Keep it up, fellow writer!
Verna Mull 02/27/10
I loved this little story. So typical of a child, and yes, a Grandma. These memories are always so precious.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/28/10
What an adorable story. Amazing how those things happen at the most inopportune time, but it didn't bother Grammy at all. Good job.
Jan Ackerson 03/02/10
Funny! I loved the image at the very beginning, of Grammy with hands up in worship but signalling her grandson at the same time.

There are some punctuation errors that need a final polishing to really bump up the quality of this amusing story.
Carol Penhorwood 03/03/10
I could sooo relate to this story, having 10 grandchildren of my own! Memories to last a lifetime! Great job with this story, Ruth, I loved it. It warmed the heart.
Noel Mitaxa 03/18/10
"Fangs" for the reminder that grandchildren are our reward for having kids of our own! You've woven warmth, excitement, family love and devotion to God into this huge first step for a child, and you've portrayed it with skill and clarity. Very well done
AnneRene' Capp 07/17/10
Ruth, I love your humor and am beginning to think we are "somehow" related! I got a HUGH lol out of: he was giving exaggerated toothless smiles to everyone.