The Official Writing Challenge
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02/25/10
I enjoyed reading your story. Right on the topic for 'shhh'...cute. Sad, yet with a positive ending. God does have a plan.
I'm very impressed. Very high quality writing, in my opinion. Excellent description (both of surroundings and of action), excellent dialogue, very smooth scene and time changes. I especially like the way you change time of day and room by starting with a phrase of dialogue and then putting in a simple reference to the two of you folding laundry in the laundry room -- excellent technique, that I'll look forward to trying out in my own writing. Plus, an excellent story in its own right, with a solid message about God.
What a sad but wondrous story. I wish we could whisper Jesus loves you in every child's ear. Well- written, you pulled me into the story and I found myself cheering Angus on.
03/02/10
Beautifully written, and heartbreaking. One of my favorites on this level.