The Official Writing Challenge
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I can see the many great points you are making and you had me wanting to know how the nightmare would end.

Double spacing between paragraphs will make this much easier to read.

A beginner myself, I want to suggest Ann and Jan's writing courses which have helped me tremendously.
What an intense picture you painted. I could see the rocks, and purple glow quite clearly. I liked how you tied in the reassurance in the end.
Interesting allegory!

Be careful of run-on sentences and comma splices--you had quite a few here, and they distracted a bit from your writing.

You do very well with descriptive prose--hope to read more in the future.